[ACC 3: Guest
What] Lonely Man
Long
time ago, in the Canada Senior High School there was a couple, Brian and
Catherina. It had been two years related well each other and more than a friend.
They began their relationship at the begins of Senior High School. Brian and
Catherina is a Canadian. Brian is a handsome and kind hearted boy. Catherina is
a pretty and loyal girl. Their relationshipis very good and complementary, Brian loved Catherine and
Catherina loved Brian as well.
They
relationship’s loose when the moment of end leason in Canada Senior High
School. The school had been held ceremonial party for students that past and
sucsess this time. Especially for Brian and Catherina too. They would be
separated and close the relationship in the Senior High School. Finally,They
very sad for the discord in Senior High School, Catherine was cry when Brian
said “Cathrine, Don’t Worry for the relationship. Although now we will be
separated, but somewhere or sometime we shall met again and unite again. I Love
you Cathrine”. Then Brian did a first kiss in the brow’s Catherine. Catherine
very sad and carried away with his told for her, she could not leave him
because she love him, and she’s said: “I cannot leave you Brian, i want to spend
the time with you forever. Sure, we shall met again and relate again. I love
you too Brian”.
Two
years ago, Brian and Catherine really separated. Brian continue the education
in the New York, and Catherine stayed in the Canda to continue her education.
Brian
in the lecture still things about Catherine in Canada, Brian could not concentrate her education
because her. But, her relate broke when Brian saw the beautiful girl with long
hair and glamour person. He saw the girl for a long time, she is beautiful more
than Catherine and he getting acquainted with Carolina and they relate more
closer. They almost walk together and Brian decided that Carolina is the his
endless love. Brian and Carolina had been a couple for months. But, the time
change when He saw Carolina with others people. Actually, Carolina was
Playgirl. She was has many boyfriend, she accept Brian because she only want to
show off. Brian’s heart is very broken because Caroline disappointed him, Brian
is very regretful for him fool to choose that girl.
In
the Canada, She is continue her education but Catherina was waiting Brian for a
long time. Every night she was crying because she could not met again with her
first love, Brian. Her parents was very
sad too because they daughter. They daughter was lonely and always wait Brian,
but her parents had make a plan. The plan is gave in marriage to the person
that her parents choose. Finally, her parents gave marriage her with a handsome
man, kind man, and he is very closer with her parents. Finally, Catherina could
not waiting Brian more long time again and her age now was 24 years old. She
had decided and would marriage with the person’s that her parents choose.
Brian
finally made up her mind that Catherina was the girl and Brian really to make
Catherina was her mind. Then, Brian went to the Canada that place Catherina
live to found her again, to told her that he was very love her, and he would
did sorry to her about the things he had done. He was searching everywhere in
Canada, finally he found her in the church. She was so happy with her wedding
dresh, but she was crying while she saw me and told in her heart “Brian, I
missed you kisses in the first time but i’m so sorry you came late to me only
several minutes although you travelled so far to me but i’m so sorry you came
late”.
Finally,
Brian was very sad and regretfully and he was going home again. He was wishing
be back to the time when they are spend the time together and where they were
be more than friends. Brian still could saw her in the church, out in the
streets inside Brian’s head he could still hear what her said.
~FINISH~
Nb : Please guest what the song that match
with that text. And i’m so sorry if my text and my words in the text is fault,
please comment what is the song and please input if words in my text is any fault. Thank you so much :D
6 November 2012 pukul 04.00
Aaaaa.. that story isn't strange for me, jonn!! but now I just forget the tittle of the song.. (ok, I'll think harder to guess) hmm have you inserted a part of lyric of the song in your text? it can be clue to guess it. hehe
Anyway, I like your text jonn, but please be careful with your sentences! ex: "Brian and Catherina is a Canadian". I think it should be "Brian and Catherina were Canadian". I mean, please consist to use past tense.
One more ex: "They very sad for..". It should be "They were very sad for..". I mean it needs (tobe). Thanks :)
*don't forget to check my text too*
6 November 2012 pukul 04.03
It's hard to guess Jo -_-" but I think It's MICHAEL LEARNS TO ROCK - 25 MINUTES :D Is it right?
But, Jo, when In the Dialog, sometimes you use the past tense, it should be present tense, for example in this sentence "" Catherine was cry when Brian said “Cathrine, Don’t Worry for the relationship. Although now we will be separated, but somewhere or sometime we shall met again and unite again. I Love you Cathrine” ""
there is word 'met' I think it should be 'meet', but I'm sorry if I'm wrong :p
Nobody's perfect :d
6 November 2012 pukul 04.54
yeah, maybe Michael Learns to Rock - 25 minutes.
the story reminds me of the song SNSD - time machine
almost same the meaning.
And the story is interesting because is doesn't make me bored.(з´⌣`ε)
6 November 2012 pukul 05.59
Aaaaaa.. she (little angel) reminds me!! I remember that song.. :D is it true Jonn??
hehe.. I and little angel ever heard it when we were in JHS :p
6 November 2012 pukul 06.04
Jon your story as diary entries :p will be more interesting if you give some dialogue. But this is nice story ^^
I think It's Michael Learns to Rock - 25 MINUTES :D Is it right?
6 November 2012 pukul 19.00
@Afriska : wkwkwk, that's no diary fris.. hehe. I had been gave some dialogues for my story. Thanks
7 November 2012 pukul 04.41
from his sentences :"finally he found her in the church. She was so happy with her wedding dresh, but she was crying while she saw me and told in her heart “Brian, I missed you kisses in the first time but i’m so sorry you came late to me only several minutes although you travelled so far to me but i’m so sorry you came late”."
I know this song --> 25 Minutes from MLTR
Brian regretfully for the time he lost, i remember the lyrics "Seize the day or die regretting the time you lost" from A7X (Seize the day). :D
It's romantic and tragic story. :(
hehe I remember when I was in Junior High School, same with Meimei and Little Angel.. :'))':
Two tumbs up ! q(^_^)p (y)
7 November 2012 pukul 07.05
huhuh .. This story is very touching jon. ckckck
it's very interested ..
i agree with the other. is it Michael Learns to Rock - 25 MINUTES ...
hehehe :)
7 November 2012 pukul 16.14
that's nice :D
but I think you should give more dialogue ;)
I think that's 25 Minutes from Michael Learns to Rock ^_^
9 November 2012 pukul 01.54
Ow, John. Your story was sooo touching :')
Brian must be felt so sorry. And Catherine also...
Anyway, I didn't know the song before, but from the others' thought... I also guess it as 25 Minutes from Michael Learns to Rock~ Hehehe :3
14 Januari 2013 pukul 14.59
Hmmm I guess it is MLTR songs heheh... it is my favorite songs heheh.... your story is clearly enough but maybe there are some grammatical correction, in 2nd paragraph Cath "was cry" you should put only 1 verb, it consist of 2 verb, almost of your error is about "verb"... please be carefull :)